the actual wedding.
We walked through the maze and I forgot I was in a dress. He turned around and I ran ahead of him." Thalia where the hellheim did you go." He asked and I smiled." I guess you'll have to find me." I said and he walked around." Thalia." Thor said sounding scared." What's the matter." I asked and looked at him. The was a hurt baby shadow hound." Omg Thor I have to help it." I said and knelt next to it." Thalia I don't think that's a good idea." He said. I healed the small baby and it jumped on me licking my face." Aww Thor look its so loving." I said an she sat next to me. That baby shadow hound jumped on him and licked him too." Aww he likes you." I said and Thor chuckled." Thalia its a girl." He said and it jumped on me." I wanna keep her." I said." We cant keep her." He said." Please Thor please I'll train her I promise." I said and picked her up." I don't know." He said." Just look in her eyes and say no." I said and he looked at the pup in my hands." Fine lets go show mother." He said and we ran to frigga." Hello you two how was the walked." She asked and then she saw the little wolf type creature In my hand." Aww who's this little creature." She asked and I sat next to her." We haven't named her but she's so soft and fluffy." I said and the little pup jumped on her and kissed her face." Aww she's so precious." She said and I smiled." I want to keep her but he's not so sure." I said and Thor sat next to me." I think you should she's very sweet." Frigga said and I smiled." Okay we can keep her." Thor said and i hugged him." Yay. What should we call her." I asked and sif saw her and nearly attacked her but I picked her up." Sis chill. She's good." I said and she sat in front of me." What about storm. I mean we both like storms and lightning." Thor said and I smiled." I love it." I said and storm jumped on Sif and licked her." Storm." I said and she jumped on me." Why is Thalia holding a shadow hound." Loki asked." Because she's my pet." I said and he gasped." Stormy." I said and she licked me." Come here." Thor said and she tackled him to the floor. Loki looked at us before sitting next to sif." I don't know I Odin will like it but he will have to do." Frigga said and I had to pry storm off Thor." Lets go see." I said and stood up. We all walked into the main hall and I was holding storm because no one else would." Hello father." Thor said and I smiled and cuddled the black and grey furred shadow hound in my hand. I felt thor's arms around me and storm kissed him." Why is there a shadow hound in my hall." Odin asked." Before you go crazy about me bringing a dangerous animal inside the palace just hear what I have to say." I said and he nodded." Okay me and Thor were walking when we found her she was hurt so I healed her and she's the sweetest creature ever. She hasn't attacked anyone and she is so fluffy I mean feel her fur." I said and he stroked her and smiled. Storm licked him and he looked shocked." You can keep her." He said and I smiled. I picked storm up and ran to Thor." Yay." I said and he hugged me. We walked to the garden and she chased butterflies around while me and Thor sat and watched." She's gorgeous ." He said." I know." I said and she ran to us looking proud then I saw the butterfly in her mouth." Oh wow." I said and she let it out. Her ears flipped all over as she ran around us." We better head inside its getting dark." I said and picked storm up. I had to sleep in my room alone but I had storm and sif was coming later. I felt her snuggling into me on my cloud. I fell asleep and no nightmares came. But thoughts of tomorrow came to mind." Thalia I swear to god if you down get up right now I will break your nose." Sif said and I shot up scaring storm who dived under the blanket." Aww baby come out its okay." I said and picked her up." Wedding." Sif said and I placed storm in a basket that was made from a cloud." Get dressed." Sif said and handed me a dress. It was simple but I liked it. It was strapless and tight around the chest and went kind of puffy below the rib cage." You look lovely." Sif said and I smiled." Sif I'm not wearing heels." I said and she tapped them. A knife came out of the heel." Fine." I said and put them on. She platted my hair and we walked to the main hall. The music started and I walked down the isle.( I cba writing out the ceremony so skip)." You may now kiss the bride." The priest said and I kissed him. I knew it wasn't Loki because he was in the crowd. I pulled away and he hugged me. The window smashed above us and I made a force field as the glass showered over us." Frost giants!" Sif shouted. I transformed into my armour and grabbed my staff." Thalia come on." Thor shouted I ran to him and stabbed a frost giant that was behind him." Loki." Odin said." The ice block thing." I said and ran to the weapons vault to see Loki about to pick it up." Stop." I said and he dropped it and looked at me." Why hello there." He said." You cant just let Thor have one good day can you." I said and he frowned." He has everything he even won the love of my life." He said and I walked towards him." I'm not the love of your life if I married Thor." I shouted and he came towards me." Take one more step and I'll behead you." I said and he stopped." Why don't you join me Thalia you'd make the perfect queen for when I take over asgard." He said and I slapped him." I love Thor and I will not join you. And you are not taking over asgard." I said and he looked shocked that I slapped him." When I take over you'll be sorry you did that." He said and the destroyer came out and punched him. It looked at me and got ready to shoot when Odin stopped it. Thor hugged me." You're okay." He said and I hugged him back." I love you Thor." I said and felt something sharp in my back." Backstabbing bitch." Loki growled and I fell to the floor.
she fell to the floor and Loki's dagger was in her back." No no no Thalia." I said and picked her up." Take her to the infirmary I'll deal with Loki." Sif said and Loki looked scared. I ran to the infirmary and placed her on a bed." Thalia please open your eyes." I said and they opened slowly." Thor I'm not going to make it that dagger was dipped in dragon poison.if anything I have five minutes to live." She said and felt sick." Thalia I know you can survive you just have to believe." I said and she chuckled. I looked at her arm and her veins were turning black from the poison." Thor I have loved you my whole life and if I don't survive take care of storm." She said and I heard crying a shadow hound crying I looked at the door and heard scratching. I opened the door and storm ran in and jumped up next to Thalia who's eyes were closed." Thalia please wake up." I said and nothing happened. The nurse ran In and checked her pulse and her face dropped." She's not breathing." She said and I dropped to my knees." Thor how is she." Sif asked." She's not here any more." I said and she knelt next to me and hugged me." I'm so sorry Thor." She said." Not even a day." I said and she helped me up. I walked out of the room and storm followed me. I picked her up and walked to mother." Where is Thalia." She asked and I sat down next to her." She's gone ." I said and she frowned." I'll look after storm for you." She said but I held onto her." She's the last thing I have of her I'll take care of her." I said and she nodded." Her funeral will be tomorrow." Mother said and went to tell father. I heard dragons crying and her little dragon appeared in front of me." I know of your love for Thalia and I know of her death and I give you my deepest sympathy good luck prince Thor." He said and I smiled." She was amazing why why did he do it." I asked." The last thing she said to him was I love Thor and I will not join you. And you are not taking over asgard. He was mad and knew to hurt you he would have to hurt her." He said and i cried making storm lick me.
Not trying to be mean or anything, but it's kind of confusing to read when they are all talking in the same sentence. The quotation marks are also confusing too. I mean it's a good story and all, but it just needs a few tweaking, that's all.